R+P Post 19: Our rough cut

 Our finished rough cut

I found editing the rough cut with Tom was really fun, as we both worked well together, as well as individually, and  it was fun to watch the footage we had taken. I also think the rough cut was not bad for a first attempt, although there are lots of improvements we still need to make. For example, after the test shoot we though that the majority of our shots were fine in terms of length, but then when it came to the rough cut edit, we realised some of them were too long. For example, we have decided that Toby will wear bandages when walking around the house, as shot 11 lasts too long because we didn't fit down the stair and make sure the strings weren't wobbling.

I think that the rough cut would have been much better with the improvements we need to make for the shoot. That being said, there were still some issues that we need to resolve with regards to the narrative, and some of the continuity sequences, as well as the lingering interview shot with Joyce, that can be resolved in editing. We have also made a shot list of all the changes made, which we will soon transfer onto our storyboard.

A list of improvements to be made:

1. Make Joyce's interview shot more engaging. We can do this by using more cutaways, typical of the documentary-style editing we hope to achieve in the main edit.
   
2. Change the end sequence. Currently, the end sequence is very out of place and makes no sense in the narrative. We intend to change that by making a change t the storyboard. Instead of having Toby get his dinner, we are going to have a sequence of him packing the car with all of his university stuff, then being driven away by Joyce.
   
3. Make the first shot make more sense. This is the shot where he is in bed, and the camera crew watch him wake up. Again, we are making a change to the storyboard by having Joyce bring him breakfast in bed, as it is his last day at home, and this will make the shot make more sense as part of the narrative.
   

Our new shot list